Remembering Robin Williams via http://ift.tt/1nN0Vwc
Hello folks! I am coming down to the wire on my #PitchWars edits, and wanted to share just a smidge of the process with you.
One of the most important things to me, and mentors obviously, is crisp, concise writing. I want the tone and voice of my MS to stand out from the slush because I chose my words carefully. I want my readers to feel what my MC feels, and I want to use sparse and powerful prose to achieve that.
One great way to challenge yourself in that vein is by eliminating crutch words and filter words. We are all guilty of this—but it buries our genius under layers of blahhh.
Spit shine those words until they blind your agent/mentor/bestfriendCPwhodoesn’tknowwhatshe’sgettinginto!!
I’m not going to go into too much detail about these two issues , check out Michelle Hauck’s brilliant descriptions of filtering here and crutch words here for that. What I will do is list the crutches and filters that I am finding as I go. Mine are in past tense because my manuscript is written that way.
Y’all. I had over 800 uses of the word THAT…
…don’t look at me like that (see, THAT). Use your cute little find bar. I promise you, you have a ‘that.’
So without further adieu, here’s a short list!
that / then
Anywho- feel free to use my list if you’re having trouble identifying your problem words. It’s a great starting place!
P.S.: It’s not that you have to remove these completely from your book, but when you read the sentence as a whole, can you take out anything that puts space between the MC and the reader? Can you find a better way to phrase the sentence so that you aren’t using THAT for the 50th time on the page?
Inspired by Maggie Stiefvater’s The Raven Cycle series
Fancy enough not to embarrass your rich parents, powerful enough to knock a reckless teenage boy on his butt. It fizzes and sputters, but best of all, it’s very, very orange.
- 2 oz very ripe apricots (pitted)
- 1 short sprig rosemary, leaves stripped
- ¼ oz honey
- ¼ oz fresh lemon juice
- ¾ oz bourbon
- ¾ oz St. Germain (elderflower liqueur)
- Brut champagne/sparkling wine to top
In a cocktail shaker of your choice (but you’d probably prefer a lidded Mason jar, given this is the South), muddle the apricots and rosemary leaves with the honey as thoroughly as Adam would like to grind his father’s face into the ground – which is to say, extremely thoroughly.
Add the lemon, St. Germain, bourbon, and ice. Shake it harder than Ronan would like to shake Kavinsky, for at least 30 seconds. Strain into large champagne flute over a fine mesh sieve; then sloooooowly (the way Blue wants to take it with her first suitor) top with champagne. (It helps to give it the barest stir after the first bit of champagne to distribute the tart and sweet elements and keep it from foaming over. After serving, you or your guest should stir again.) It should create a layered effect.
Wait for AAA and your designated driver.
MOCKTAIL: The Noah
Add one more ounce of muddled apricots. Replace all alcohol with club soda.
Alternatively, replace alcohol and lemon juice with Belvoir elderflower presse lemonade, available at Trader Joe’s, Whole Foods, and other specialty grocery stores.
probably I should not reblog alcoholic drinks but here I go.
If Gansey did it, then I’m in
Human Rights Watch researcher Letta Tayler just got back from Iraq where she documented tales of ISIS (Islamic State of Iraq and Syria) forcing mass expulsions and murders of Christians and ethnic minorities who are told to convert. Tayler explains the recent edict ISIS issued for Christians in the city of Mosul:
"ISIS issued an edict around mid-July and it said, "You’ve got three choices: convert, pay us a jihad tax, get out of town—and if you don’t do those, you’ll face the sword."
This was, of course, an absolutely chilling message. It was disseminated throughout the city and on the Internet as well, and at that point most of the Christians had already fled Mosul, but the few remaining families, and we’re still talking several hundred, apparently, just packed up and left. Some left with nothing but the clothes on backs, others piled whatever precious possessions they could into their cars and some of them then found at ISIS checkpoints that they were robbed of those few precious possessions that they had hoped to bring out with them. So it has been an absolutely terrifying part of a broader campaign to “cleanse” … Mosul and surrounding areas, of anyone who does not espouse this strict interpretation of Sharia that ISIS espouses.”
Propaganda image of ISIS via NBC news
Praying that the God of Peace would be known in this region. Not the Christian God. Not the Muslim God. The God of Love who delivers his babies from evil…